User talk:Mediggo/A Bard's Tale
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Sorry. I'm reading this now, but I got distracted and want to tell you that I'm stealing inspired by another idea of yours (in fact, I just didn't know how to do it), which is your font colouring. :) --Xu Davella 11:04, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
- Finished. I admire the politics that you've added in there. It's a good way to spark up some in-game debate on how and why people side or squabble the way that they do, which is pretty cool. I also really liked the little fight scene that the elementalist had with the guards, I could picture the whole thing happening and think "whoa, that's cool". And the stealthy-sneaky part that the bard lady went in with was a nice touch. There's a couple of punctuation issues that seem out of place, if you don't mind, I can go in and fix them up if that's ok? Awesome read overall, thanks for sharing. :) --Xu Davella 11:50, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
- Sure, I don't mind. Thanks for reading. :P It's not quite finished yet but I haven't had time or inspiration to come up with more yet. Mediggo 15:08, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
- First reaction: Oh dear lord the colors... Second reaction forthcoming when I actually read it. :D Konig/talk 18:19, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
- I think it's readable enough. Helps reader keep track of who's talking. And yeah, good point on that War in Kryta, but think I'm leaving it as it is. It's more clear which event/time the prologue is referring to. But yeah, I'll keep that in mind from now on, thank you. Will be helpful if I ever come up with dialogue related to those events. Mediggo 20:24, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
- Read through most of it (halfway through the last portion). Found a lot of ways to improve the piece if you care... I don't think the coloring is needed because A) other than about 2-3 lines, it's pretty clear who's talking and B) for those few lines which it isn't, an action should be given to the character anyways in order to remove the mental image (for me at least) of them standing in place while they're talking about frantic stuff (such as the beginning of "The Night" - Greag's dialogue implies he's returning/running from the temple to inform Trisha, but the lack of description makes me think he's like an NPC standing to get struck by lightning while talking of the impending doom that the PC must fix). Konig/talk 21:39, 10 October 2011 (UTC)
- Hm, that's a very good point and excellent advice... It's been a few weeks since I wrote that dialogue, and I must admit I don't know what I was thinking about when I wrote that. I'm not particularly keen on describing characters or their surroundings to detail, in part due to laziness and in part to leave it to reader's imagination. But you're totally right on that first dialogue part of the second chapter. I'd fix it, if I had time, and when I do I'd rather continue and finish this story. I was planning to come up with at least two more chapters, and maybe some kind of epilogue. Mediggo 07:01, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
- Read through most of it (halfway through the last portion). Found a lot of ways to improve the piece if you care... I don't think the coloring is needed because A) other than about 2-3 lines, it's pretty clear who's talking and B) for those few lines which it isn't, an action should be given to the character anyways in order to remove the mental image (for me at least) of them standing in place while they're talking about frantic stuff (such as the beginning of "The Night" - Greag's dialogue implies he's returning/running from the temple to inform Trisha, but the lack of description makes me think he's like an NPC standing to get struck by lightning while talking of the impending doom that the PC must fix). Konig/talk 21:39, 10 October 2011 (UTC)
- I think it's readable enough. Helps reader keep track of who's talking. And yeah, good point on that War in Kryta, but think I'm leaving it as it is. It's more clear which event/time the prologue is referring to. But yeah, I'll keep that in mind from now on, thank you. Will be helpful if I ever come up with dialogue related to those events. Mediggo 20:24, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
- First reaction: Oh dear lord the colors... Second reaction forthcoming when I actually read it. :D Konig/talk 18:19, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
- Sure, I don't mind. Thanks for reading. :P It's not quite finished yet but I haven't had time or inspiration to come up with more yet. Mediggo 15:08, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
